Sunshine - A Rictameter Poem
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Sunshine
You give us warmth
Our life depends on you
You nourish the body and soul
You are the centre of our universe
Flooding our senses with delight
Tan our naked bodies
Our special star
Sunshine
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This is a wonderful poem especially reading it at this of year. Warms me up a bit.
I've been wanting to try a Rictameter for some time now.
it is nice... i think sunshine is the sense of love... is the sense of nature.. and it is the queen of the sky
Boy doesn't that sound great right about now! Nicely done!
78 degrees here today , but its past noon and the sun has yet to shine:(
I really love this poem of yours it is so beautiful and I love the picture of the sun, it is almost as bright as your smile. Hope your day is full of sunshine.
@ Jami - Thank you for your kind and generous comments and votes up. The sun is shining here in Toronto but it is only - 1 Celcius which is 29 degrees Farenheit.
@Susan - Thank you for your kind and generous comments. This is my second rictameter. I look forward to reading your first one.
@Meme - Thank you for your kind and generous comments. "The Queen of the Sky," I really like that.
@Audrey - Thank you for your kind and generous comments. Sending some sunshine your way.
@MATS - Thank you for kind and generous comments and for the sunshine wishes. One can never get enough sunshine.
Thank you everyone. Wishing you a day filled with sunshine. :-)
Voted up, awesome, and beautiful Sueswan. You are our sunshine Sueswan. Another great poem my friend! Have a great Sunday.
Hi Lyricwriter
Thank you so much for your very kind, thoughtful, generous comments and votes up.
Hope you are having a great sunny Sunday. :-)
Oh, wow, I think you are our special star, Sueswan. I loved reading this morning, you have set the way for me for a sunshine filled day - thank you. My votes as always.
Hi Fennelseed,
Thank you so much!
Knowing that I have brought sunshine into your day with this poem has made me very happy. :)
Voted up,awesome and beauitful. Your poem is beyond words another great poem.
Hi Joyce
Thank you for your great comments. I really appreciate your support and votes up my friend. :-)
Take care
Sue
What an amazing poem. One of my favorite things to do is to
play with you, my two legged buddy on a beautiful sunny day.
Short, simple and nice. Beautiful poem Sueswan...
Love it!!!
Hi Four Legged Buddy
Thank you for your kindness. I am so glad you enjoyed my poem.
Looking forward to many more sunny days so we can play. :-)
Hi Nuchime
Thank you so much for your sweet and beautiful comments. :-)
Hi Sue. Nice to see you tried the rictameter , you did a real good job
Beatiful, sunshine certainly cheers ones day.
Voting up beautiful
Hi Rosemay
Thank you! So glad you liked it. :-)
Wishing you lots of sunshine.
Such an eye opening beauty..:) Sunshine is just that sunshine Frank
Good job! I really enjoyed this Hub. Thanks for giving us this.
Hi, Sue! I love that you are writing in all these different forms - and you're doing it so well! You keep making it look effortless because your images flow so gracefully together within the poem's structure, but I know it's actually a very difficult thing to get the hang of. Thank you for sharing another great one (and I love that it's about sunshine - it was a gray day today and this brightened up my evening!) Voted up and awesome - have a great night!
Hi Frank
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed the sunshine. :-)
Hi Mary,
Thank you! I hope you are getting lots of sunshine in Puerto Rico.:-)
Hi Fastionista
Thank you so much!
I am happy that I was able to bring sunshine into your day. :-)
Hi Sue, your poem is a beautiful warm start to the day, voting up, awesome and beautiful, thank you!
I loved this one Sue. Oh yes that up up and away is on it's way!!!
Take care and enjoy your day.
Eddy.
Hi Lesley and Eddy
Thank you my friends for your kind comments and votes up!
Enjoy your day. :-)
This was so lovely to awake to. It's still dark here and some sunshine would be most welcome after yesterday's storms. Beautiful!
Hi poetvix
Thank you for the lovely comments. Glad I could bring you some sunshine. Still dark here too.
..always love your writing - you are very special to me as a writer and a friend and a colleague - let me post this to my Facebook page and we will let the sunshine in with hopefully even more lucky readers ....
lake erie time 12:55am warm wishes from your fellow Canadian
Hi Epi
I am very thankful and grateful that you find this worthy to post to your Facebook page.
You will always bring the sunshine when you drop by.
Toronto time 9:28 pm warm wishes from your fellow Canadian.
Sue this poem is great.. tell me what the rules to this kind of poems.
I know the Haiku poems are first lien is 5
second line is 7
last line is 5
are there rules to this kind of Rictameter poems?
Debbie
Hi Debbie
Thank you. Glad you enjoyed my rictameter.
A rictameter consist of 9 lines.
The first line and the 9th line are the same and must consist of 2 syllables.
Line 1 - 2 syllables (same word(s)as line 9)
Line 2 - 4 syllables
Line 3 - 6 syllables
Line 4 - 8 syllables
Line 5 - 10 syllables
Line 6 - 8 syllables
Line 7 - 6 syllables
Line 8 - 4 syllables
Line 9 - 2 syllables(same word(s)as line 1)
I look forward to reading your first rictameter. :)
jami l. pereira 4 months ago
Ahh , sweet sunshine , beautiful star! this is beautiful and i voted up and as such . I loved this one !:) Thanks Ms.Sueswan !:)